For rewriting this passage for Wikipedia, I'll aim to make it more neutral and encyclopedic while preserving the important facts. Wikipedia style generally prioritizes conciseness, objectivity, and adherence to a neutral point of view (NPOV). Here’s a step-by-step plan:
Step 1: Identify Key Facts
- Timeline: The events occur in September 2017 and November 2017.
- Event: Anna Leigh Waters and her mother went to Allentown, Pennsylvania, during Hurricane Irma.
- Family Members: Key individuals include Anna Leigh, her mother (Leigh), her father (who stayed behind in Florida), and her grandfather (Neil Eichelberger).
- Introduction to Pickleball: Anna Leigh’s grandfather introduced her and her mother to pickleball.
- Tournament and Achievement: Anna Leigh won her first gold medal with Stacie Townsend at the Delray Beach Gamma Pickleball Classic at age ten.
Step 2: Create a Neutral, Encyclopedic Tone
- Avoid Personal Details: Wikipedia prefers avoiding unnecessary details about family members unless directly relevant to the subject’s notability. For instance, mentioning the family dog or the father's occupation may not be essential unless they tie into Anna Leigh’s career or achievements.
- Third-Person Language: Wikipedia entries avoid personal language and maintain a formal tone.
- Direct Focus on Notable Events: Emphasize the notable aspect—Anna Leigh’s early introduction to pickleball and first competitive success.
Step 3: Structure in Chronological Order
- Start with the introduction to the sport (Hurricane Irma, trip to Allentown, and introduction to pickleball).
- Follow up with her first competitive success (winning a gold medal at the tournament).
Step 4: Avoid Over-Detailing, Stay Concise
Details like the age of her partner or location specifics of the tournament should be mentioned only if they contribute directly to her story of notability.
Step 5: Check for Citations
For Wikipedia, every statement needs to be verifiable through reliable sources. When writing for Wikipedia, it’s essential to ensure that each part of the rewritten text could be backed by citations if this were added to an article.
Step 6: Rewrite with Wikipedia Guidelines in Mind
Based on the above points, here’s how the passage might be rephrased for Wikipedia:
Draft for Wikipedia:
In September 2017, due to Hurricane Irma, Anna Leigh Waters, then 10 years old, traveled with her mother to Allentown, Pennsylvania, where her grandfather, Neil Eichelberger, introduced them to the sport of pickleball. Later that year, in November, Waters participated in her first tournament at the Delray Beach Gamma Pickleball Classic, where she won a gold medal alongside Stacie Townsend, marking the beginning of her competitive career in pickleball.
Step 7: Review and Edit
- Confirm the rewritten text is neutral, concise, and objective.
- Ensure there is no extraneous detail that doesn’t directly relate to Anna Leigh’s involvement in pickleball.
This final draft would align with Wikipedia’s tone, objectivity standards, and notability focus.
Here’s the final passage, refined and ready for a Wikipedia-style entry:
In September 2017, due to Hurricane Irma, 10-year-old Anna Leigh Waters and her mother evacuated to Allentown, Pennsylvania, where her grandfather, Neil Eichelberger, introduced them to the sport of pickleball. In November 2017, Waters competed in her first pickleball tournament, the Delray Beach Gamma Pickleball Classic, where she was paired with 29-year-old Stacie Townsend by the tournament organizers. Together, they won a gold medal in doubles, marking the beginning of Waters' competitive career in pickleball.
This version maintains neutrality, is concise, and focuses on verifiable achievements and key events.
